3.3.11

Roses and Love!

I just wrote this. I decided to take something familiar and attempt to twist it into the unexpected, though i realize this has probably been done many times in many ways (I can't think of a more cliche way to describe love, and writing an 'arch-nemesis' poem about it isn't that new I am sure). Either way, as always, enjoy!

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My love is like a bright red rose,

Cut early across country and shipped

In the ghettos and by the highways it dwells and thrives.

By the cars I give myself to all who dare look onto me,

Primed with enough sustinence for my love to appeal to the would be reciever –


My love is like a bright red rose,

I know I am among others of my kind, doing the same dance for the same reasons

We dance in fear however, our days are nigh and our nights frigid.

Day by day one or two of us surrenders to the elements and is cast astray.

It is that freedom I seek, lying in the garbage company to other used individuals.

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My love is like a bright red rose,

Thorns are cut, leaves removed, my love is vulnerable and

Uncorrupted as opposed to the figure selling it for profit.

The people pass me day by day as my love whithers and moves on.

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Since this has been recently written and hasn't seen a second set of eyes or second revision, please note that it is unfinished. As always, open to suggestions (particularly the absent final line).

1 comment:

  1. Hm. This one is a little difficult for me to figure. I'm not sure if the speaker is talking as the rose, or if the speaker is just relating his/her love to a rose.
    It feels like it is describing love in terms of being eager to love someone, wanting to give the love to someone. The desire to lie in the company of other used individuals sounds like wanting to have been spent, the feeling one has when you have given your love.

    I could be so very wrong on all accounts, since I am absolutely terrible at deciphering poetry. Either way, I like it!

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